Dahveed II took much longer to write than anticipated, principally because I didn't know where the book began and where it ended for a very long time. It wasn't until after I'd written book four, that I was able to identify the major breaking points in Dahveed's life, and tailor the books to that. The publisher was very patient while the manuscript alternately grew and shrank as I tried to find the place to end it. Once the period of Dahveed's life was determined, I faced the task of keeping myself on track as I told the story. Book one had a very straightforward story line, but book two not only continued the story line, but introduced many new characters---with story lines of their own---and planted many "hooks" for future books in the series. Things became tangled very quickly as I juggled using "hooks" from book one, creating "hooks" for book three and beyond, told Dahveed's story, Jonathan's story, Michal's story, stories for new characters . . . I do not think I could have done it with any coherency without the expert help of my agent, Lee Hough of Alive Communications. His comments and critique were invaluable as well as his recommendation of the book Story by Robert McKee. I spent a great deal of time learning what tools I needed in order to write Dahveed's story as a series, then learning to use those tools. I was, however, happy with the results. And it was a very good thing I learned it all because when I began thinking about editing book three, I realized I would need every tool I'd learned, and would probably have to invent some more! Research had slowed considerably, giving me time to concentrate on editing and writing, but it never stops completely. If I find something that is relevant to the part of Dahveed's story I haven't done yet, I will take notes on it and add them in. Colleagues at work will often pass along notes of sources they have found which I might find useful, and I've been alerted to several additional books by my editor, Gerald Wheeler. The story keeps getting richer with each source, and I hope I've passed that richness on to the readers.

Cut Scenes:
As promised, here are some of the cut scenes from Dahveed II. If you want to know what exactly happened when Dahveed went to Chephirah, and about Dahveed and Jonathan's battle in the anteroom when Dahveed returned from the town, see below!

Dahveed and Jonathan Return to Gibeah after the Covenant This scene is placed on pg. 94 at the very end of Chapter 5.
Dahveed Goes to Chephirah This scene is placed on pg. 109 before the break to Balak's viewpoint.
Dahveed and Jonathan's Battle in the Anteroom This scene is placed immediately after the one above on pg. 109.
The Day After the Anteroom Battle This scene is placed on pg. 111 at the very end of chapter 7.
Dahveed and Jonathan Deal with Mahesa and his Charge This scene is placed on pg. 196 just before the break.
Dahveed is Demoted to Commander of the Second Unit This scene is placed on pg. 214 at the very end of chapter 19.
Jonathan Quells Abner After Dahveed is Assigned to the Second Unit This scene is placed on pg. 216 just before the break to Dahveed's viewpoint.
Dahveed Asks Jonathan for a Forge for Lotan This scene is placed on pg. 218 at the very end of Chapter 20.
Balak's Flight to the Jordan This scene is placed on pg. 401 at the very end of chapter 41

Errata:
My apologies for the following major errors in the book. The story of how they got there is long and complex and shouldn't happen again! Between my editors and myself, we think we've ironed out all the wrinkles which resulted in what follows.

On page 119, fifth paragraph. Abner gives Shaul a wax tablet, not a messenger tablet.
On page 321, second paragraph. Dahveed sends Ahiam to the local brothel, not the Brass Lion which is in Jebus.


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